Taming The Lion – Public

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Hey everyone. This is a short story that I wrote the other day. I’m just looking for feedback on how well my writing style comes across. Are there things that I do that you like? Don’t like? Just need to improve on? Anything you can tell me would be helpful. Word count: 400

She stared at the knife in her hand as if she expected it to tell her what to do next. When it didn’t, she continued what she was doing. Once, then twice, more, her arm shot forward. The knife found the lion’s belly each time. Her laughter broke the silence, alerting those around to her presence.

A bird, a friend of the lion perhaps…

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