… the moon, I was held in thrall by its ebb and flow and the way it did grow as it made its way down low. From then on it was my main foe.
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Word Count: 33
This bit of silliness brought to you in response to this week’s Trifextra:
This week we are asking you to count syllables. And words. It’s a lot of math for those of us who might be more accustomed to dealing with words, but we’re confident you can pull it off.
We are asking for a 33-word response to the following snippet:
The first time I saw. . .
Here’s the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each. We’re going low-brow on your this week. Or not. Can you class it up under these restrictions? Give us your best.
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How did I do? Did I class it up? Or was my little rhyme “low-brow?”
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I like it!
The challenge you posted last week is going to turn the rest of my hair grey. I don’t know how you fiction writers do this on a regular basis!
We cheat.
The secret is to no over think it… especially for the little flash pieces, because you don’t have to worry about an extended plot or future character development. So, we just start typing and let the words take the story where they will… unchecked, uncomplicated. 😀
My mind immediately when to something crazy so there’s no way I could class it up and write one. You did a great job with it though. Ahh, the moon.
No, it’s not “Ahh, the moon,” it’s *fist shaking* “The Moon! How you vex me!” Or something like that.
Really nicely done! While the moon doesn’t vex me, it does have me in it’s thrall (I love this word). I can see the whole relationship in these 33 well chosen words.
Thanks! I’m glad you like it.
The moon… as a teenager I used to wonder how it could have so much power but only choose to express it in control the tides. I wanted it to share its power with me, but it never did.
I can appreciate that. I liked to mark time by the phases of the moon. It’s nearly impossible to do that up here in WA during the winter. I miss her.
Just during the winter? I thought it was cloudy all the time up there?
I grew up in the desert, and now that I live in a big city, I miss the whole night sky. I used to see a sky full of light and blinking stars, and now I don’t get to see much of anything at all… except the moon.
The moon is fascinating to me, too. The last sentence hints of more story.
There is always more to a story, isn’t there? 😉
Beautiful language, nicely done.
Thank you!
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You will never defeat the inexorable pull of the moon!!!
thanks for reminding me of the challenge. Full credit will be given.
Thanks for giving me the credit and linking to it. 😉
Yeah, that pesky moon. Grumble, grumble.
What fun! You made it so…
(see what I did there?) 😉
Hahaha
Yes, I caught that. 😉
The moon made me think that fur and claws would grow…
I considered going that route… but, ran out of words too soon.
You rocked it!
Thanks!
That darned, Bjorn!!! I was going through all of the comments, saying to myself, “No one has mentioned a werewolf yet! No one has mentioned a werewolf yet!” And then, second last comment from the end……..freakin’ Bjorn, beats me to the punch. Makes me want to howl! 🙂
He’s sneaky like that. 😉
The moon is a popular subject for this prompt! I like how you surprised us with the “foe” part.
It has power and it won’t share with me. What else could be except my foe!?
Matticus! It’s been awhile. Not sure if you still remember me but we met on BBW.
I was looking at the Trifecta page today (really, I was looking at how to get my blog out there even more), and saw your link! I love these 33 words that you came up with (don’t care that you “cheated”). I might do this and talk about leaves or tape or something.
See you around!
Tape! Do it! I would love to see what 33 words you put together around tape. 😀
Ah so poetic and Ah the Moon, both fascinating ! I am in Love with Moon…It is so magical you know !
I do know, that’s why it is my foe. It has all that magic and won’t share with me. Rude. Very, very rude of it.
“From then on it was my main foe.”—‘Cause you’ve been a werewolf ever since? 😉
Enjoyed this!
Because it holds the power I can never attain!
Or, because I’m a werewolf. I’m not really sure…
How can such a lovely orb be your foe?
It has the magic I crave! It controls the tides, holds sway over our water… I want that kind of power!
Then go study nature magic, my friend. That’s the first thing you learn;-)
Study? Blah. That sounds a lot like work. Why can’t I just have innate magic?
As a member of This Green Earth, you do. But you need to train to use it.
What kind of train? I like trains.
Those that can move on water and go between dimensions.
I don’t have one of those. Dang. Do you know where I can get one?
Talk to Raistlin. I think he owns one.
(Love that you dropped the name, knowing I would understand exactly who you are talking about.)
He’s hard to get in touch with, between planes as he is, plus being the recluse he is I’m not sure he’d waste any of his time on me. But, it’s a place to start. I’ll see what happens.
Good luck then:-)
Once you acquire the train, I’ll refer you to an expert.
Dang it, how can you be a writer and not verbose? I could go on and on and on and on…
The 33 word challenges are both refreshing and, well, a challenge.
On days when I don’t have a lot of time to be creative, I like that they limit how much I can write. And, on days when I have a great idea of what I want to say, I struggle to get it down to just 33 words.
For this post, there was so much I wanted to say about why the moon was my foe… and I said some of it but had to cut it down to get to the target. In the end, perhaps it was best that the statement was vague?
I really liked it. Sounds like you have a bit of poetry-prose going. I love that stuff.
I haven’t heard of this challenge before, will have to give it a shot.
Trifecta puts out new challenges every monday, and switch up between exactly 33 word responses, and responses between 33 and 333 words. Check it out! I think you’ll come up with some great ones.
Will do – thanks for the tip. I’m starting to realize that I have lived a sheltered blog life.
Not that sheltered! I’ve seen you commenting on some great blogs.
And there are too many challenges out there anyway. Can’t possibly do them all.
I’ve wondered recently if I rely on them too much anyway. Wouldn’t it be better for me to come up with some original posts, without needing a prompt to get me started?
I do, but I’m selective. I don’t comment on that many blogs, but when I follow I like to really participate. But honestly, I don’t get out much, even though I love meeting people who want to talk.
I’ve never actually done one of the prompt things, but I think it would be interesting to compare what I do with what other people are doing.
This is the part where I admit that I’m a terrible participant in these challenges. I write them, I link them, I post them… but I don’t often see what everyone else is doing. Partially, that’s because there are a lot of participants. Partially, that’s because they aren’t all regulars on my blog and I try to save my time for the people who stick around for all of my silliness. Partially, that’s because I’m lazy and a terrible blogger.
I’m the same way. Save the efforts for the people who stick around. There are very very few people I follow on regular basis who don’t ever really reciprocate. I hate to be that way, but there’s only so much time. Plus I have a terrible memory. The more someone shows up, the more likely I am to head over. The ‘essential reads’ are withering up for me.
I’m a worse blogger than you, dude, trust me.
I love that we are competing over worst blogger. 😉
That’s cause we are humble folks. But you are a good writer. It is better to be a good writer and bad blogger or good blogger but bad writer?
Ah, I think that would depend entirely upon the audience you have, and the audience you are hoping for.
I like it too. It’s fun to think of something so. . .fixed and beyond our control as being a foe. Great thoughts. Thanks for linking up.
As always, thanks for the prompts.
enjoyed your piece – thanks.
Glad you liked it!
I liked the little bit of rhyme in that. Very nice. 🙂
Thank you!
A bit moonstruck, eh – fun retort.
Thanks!
I thought about going with the moon, but then I went with a typical love at first sight poem. Original, right?
Are you a werewolf? Their brows are low.
Not a werewolf, just a simple guy, who wishes he had power like the moon does. Jealous, I guess.
Oooooo I so love the moon! This sent a shiver down my spine as I read it 🙂
Hooray! Spine shivers is exactly what I was going for! 😀
Makes me wonder what’s so bad about it…
It has power. I want power… so, pretty much boils down to jealousy.