she trembled

She peeled back the layers, letting them fall carelessly around her feet.

He watched from the doorway, casually leaning against the frame, feigning calm.  It was, of course, a facade as his anticipation and excitement grew with each new item that settled to the floor.  Patience, he urged his pounding heart and aching flesh.

With a wink and a coy smile, she finished her preparation and slipped from his view.  The cool wrappings soothed her burning skin as she nestled beneath them.  Her own heart drowned out the sound of his soft steps across the room.  Her eyes were wide open.

He joined her under the sheets, wrapped up together away from everything else.

They shared a sweet, passionate, kiss as their legs wound together, and then he dipped his head to the side to press his lips to her temple.  She trembled, as she always had since he’d first discovered that spot.  He moved on, finding the other places that made her shiver and gasp and then their bodies became one.


Word Count: 171

Definitely something different for me, and perhaps that’s going to be true for a lot of this week’s responses to the Triextra:

“As you may or may not know, November 15 is National Erotica Day.  Trifecta is not an erotica-specific type of place, but we never shy away from a chance to stretch our creative limbs, and we hope you’ll join us as we dive in to celebrate this quirky day.
We are asking for an open write this week–33 to 333 words of erotic writing.  No specific words need to be used, and we aren’t necessarily banning any either.  If you want to see what our writers came up with last year, click on over and check them out.  This year we are imposing one additional limitation: we are not accepting any entries that deal with sexual violence.  We want this to be a celebration of sensuality.  Posts that contain graphic violence will be immediately deleted from our collection.”

So, how did I do?  I was trying to set the mood without really being to explicit.  As this is a family friendly blog, didn’t want to change my rating by being overly graphic.  I’m not sure I could write like that anyway.

84 thoughts on “she trembled

  1. the place where sweetness and sex meet, at her temple, is such a perfect place to start.
    Almost as if you promise to care of her and then “take care of her” in so many words. That is sensual.

  2. OK, not to ruin the moment, but your post on my page is under the “Weekly Challenge” post with a pic of a very “layered” head of lettuce.

    Very Georgia O’Keefe-style placement, if you ask me. And feel free to erase this comment.

    • That’s hilarious!!

      I wonder how many other people it is showing up that way for.

      I started the post trying to just allude to everything, and have the reader guess what I was actually talking about. In my head, as I was writing it, she was peeling back the layers of an onion, rather than clothes. A head of lettuce is just as good. 😛

      • I understand. I also understand that when a cat finds its way to that spot, you don’t want to move it for anything as trivial as spelling. 😉

        Last night I had a cat curled up in my lap, and the Little Prince screaming for attention upstairs… I, um, didn’t move very fast. (In my defense, the Queen was already upstairs with the kiddo so it wasn’t anything that needed my immediate attention.)

      • Oh wow, that really was a no win situation. The Queen, The Little Prince, and a furry Goddess all demanding attention at the same time. I wouldn’t want to be in that situation 😉

  3. I thought this was excellently done! I was going to write something about it, but the comments had me laughing, haha! 😀 I got the lettuce pic with the piece, too. 🙂

  4. Oh my goodness! A little naughtiness in the Kingdom. 🙂

    Really nice … sensual, erotic, loving.

    I was sort of expecting it to twist into some sort of horror tale … like she suddenly turned into an alien, or blew up, or something… 🙂

    • Hah, I guess a lot of my stories do end up with some sort of twist, don’t they? Well. I guess I’ll have to work on mixing it up more then. 😛
      Glad you liked this. I wasn’t sure how it was going to turn out or be received… definitely not like anything I normally write.

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