Jeremy created a mock battlefield in the sand. Expertly using the stick he’d pulled from a nearby tree, he mapped out the enemy defenses and the location of the target his team had assembled to retrieve.
“Mike,” he looked up from his map and pointed towards his second in command, “I want you to take Jenny and Ian around the front. You will be the diversion and the signal for David and I to sneak through the back door and free the hostages.”
As he spoke, he used the stick to indicate where he wanted the two teams to make their assaults and then made sure to make eye contact with each of them. They were all on board. They were all ready.
“Stay focused. We’ll need to use all of our craft to pull this one off.”
Jeremy used the palm of his free hand to wipe away the map, lest it be seen by an enemy sentry before they could get into position. Then he rose from his haunches, flung the stick back towards the tree, and pulled the black ski mask down over his face. The others followed suit. He could tell they were nervous but that was okay. He trusted them and new they would get the job done.
“And, Mike, don’t break anything. Just make a lot of noise.”
“Got it.”
“Okay, let’s go.”
The two groups slipped away, intent on their separate tasks. Jeremy and David reached their position first, backs pressed firmly up against the building, trying to disappear into the shadows. While they waited for Mike’s team to start the diversion that would allow them to slip in undetected, they could taste their reward already.
The whole team eagerly awaited the cookies they were about to liberate from Jeremy’s parents’ pantry.
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Word Count: 299
Written in response to this week’s Trifecta Writing Challenge:
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I really like this. It’s just the way kids think they are behaving in their own minds. Reality is they probably stormed in and pulled off a smash and grab.
Hah! Yeah, probably less smash and more grab… Well, that’s how it would have gone in my house.
Yes, and either the theme to Mission Impossible or Get Smart would be playing in all our heads. Ooh, does that age me or what?
Not necessarily since they’ve done remakes of them recently. Now, if you were talking about the TV shows…
Unfortunately I am talking about the original TV series.
Hah! Well, you didn’t have to admit it! 😉
Haha, this is cute! So much more daring and adventurous than say, simply asking for cookies 🙂
Well, asking allows the people in power the option of saying no. Taking them, liberating them from their captor, is the only way to guarantee success! 😉
I expected the cookies^^ no elaboration about the diversion?
Left up to your imagination…
Initially, before the cookie reveal, did you see them using flash bangs or firing blanks at the building? And then, after the cookie reveal, did you see a group of kids banging pots and pans, yelling, screaming in boisterous play?
Nope. I saw a group of kids wearing ski masks peeking around the corner making sure the parents were engrossed in the TV^^
Hah!
Well, then no diversion is needed. TV is holding their rapt attention. 😛
Well, that was the diversion I thought of…I’d wanted to know what they saw:-P
Fair enough.
Mike, Jenny, and Ian opted to go with the “hurt child” diversion tactic. Jenny tipped over her scooter and started to cry in the front yard, Ian stayed with her, and Mike knocked on the door to ask for help.
Jenny gave an excellent performance, and recovered miraculously quickly, requiring no band aids or further treatment once the adults had looked her over, and she limped away leaning against Mike while Ian pushed the scooter.
Cool! Thanks^^
I enjoyed the light-hearted comedy and the idea of “liberating” cookies. 🙂
If nothing else, we must free them from their packages!! Viva la cookie revolution!
quite an exciting caper!
It was! Hey, when cookies are on the line, its always exciting. 😉
Cookies as hostages – this is adorable! The dialog seems a little adult for the kids, but I could imagine Jeremy mimicking a voice he’d heard in a movie, so it works. Great job!
Yep, they were definitely play the parts from something they’d read or watched. 😀 Thanks, glad you liked it.
And, now I’m feeling nostalgic for childhood. Great job 🙂
Thanks!
Ha! Liberate the cookies. They have no idea what happens next! Poor cookies…
That’s exactly what the Queen said!!! “Um, so you are liberating them just to eat them?”
Hahahaha, hadn’t thought about that as I was writing it. Oops.
hahaha adorable
Thanks!
This is super cute!Loved the “strategic planning”-it is no less than a war to sneak in to steal cookies:-)
Cookie stealing is serious business! 😉
So true 😀
This is a great read. The serious business of child’s play comes across really well. Thanks for linking up and don’t forget to come back and vote!
Glad you enjoyed it!
I’ll do my best to vote. Life in the kingdom is fairly hectic these days though. So, I can never say what I’ll be doing from one hour to the next.
I remember well the games of childhood and ‘war,’ as we sought to win some objective (though I was frequently relegated to the role of nurse; I quickly turned it to spy.) I love the deviousness you portray and the natural child’s voice. It’s all serious fun, till the cookies are liberated – then the spoils of war are divided and consumed. Very nice story.
Thanks!
I thought it was all fun and games too, but the Queen has informed me that it’s too sad to “liberate” the cookies just to have them be eaten.
I argued that they are being liberated so they can fulfill their purpose in life, but I’m not sure my argument carries much merit. 😉
Too cute and adventurous, took me back to my childhood. As for the cookies, hope they were choc-chip!
Oreos…. probably, maybe, perhaps…. definitely!
I’d start a war for some Oreos still. 😉
I like how you respected the kids’ world. That first sentence is outstanding. Hooked me completely. well done
Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it. It’s was one of the more fun pieces I’ve written for Trifecta. I was pretty happy with how it turned out too.
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Superbly done. I wish more kids had the wherewithal to stage a cookie coup these days.
They do, and probably very adeptly too, just through the video game medium. 😉
Very fun read, with nice clean prose that create the image nicely. Well done.
Thank you!
One of the coolest ones I’ve read this week!
Thanks! 😀
That is really cool. Makes me wish I were a kid again!
Never too late to go back to being a kid at heart! 😉